>Just a Dash

14 Feb

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You dragged me across
your open wound
adding salt to the pains
your absence refused to give
this mangled heart
a sawed off blob
of tangled
butcher’s meat
you can have back
it no longer beats
for me
or bleeds
for you
I rescind your
Lucio love fest
of spatter and gore
bloodied valentines
of rejected be mines
©2011 by Micael Chadwick
All Rights Reserved
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28 Responses to “>Just a Dash”

  1. Rene/ Not The Rockefellers February 14, 2011 at 5:49 pm #

    >Oh hell yes!Awesome, Micael

  2. Oilfield Trash February 14, 2011 at 5:57 pm #

    >Another awesome poem.

  3. Jewels February 14, 2011 at 6:26 pm #

    >Wow. Beautiful.

  4. Pat - Arkansas February 14, 2011 at 7:43 pm #

    >A double whammy for Valentine's Day — dark, and interesting.

  5. nene February 14, 2011 at 7:57 pm #

    >wonderful, micael

  6. Lynne H. February 14, 2011 at 8:14 pm #

    >"Love lies bleeding in my hand"..great poem sweetheart!!

  7. Reflections February 14, 2011 at 8:25 pm #

    >Wow… stunning imagery, heartfelt loss of 'rejected be mines'…

  8. Nikki Rules February 14, 2011 at 8:31 pm #

    >"You dragged me acrossyour open wound"This is the kind of thing I need to read over and over. Powerful. It all is.ツ my cyber house rules

  9. Jim Swindle February 14, 2011 at 9:24 pm #

    >A powerful poem. I'm thankful that my fwife has been faithful decade after decade, so I know what you're describing only in theory.

  10. hedgewitch February 14, 2011 at 9:33 pm #

    >Dark, bleak and bitter always works for me.

  11. becca February 14, 2011 at 10:13 pm #

    >amazing poem

  12. Lolamouse February 14, 2011 at 10:19 pm #

    >Bloody brilliant! It's like the anti-Hallmark Valentine! I love it!

  13. Pam Tucker February 14, 2011 at 11:06 pm #

    >My kind of valentine! Great poem.

  14. Brian Miller February 14, 2011 at 11:35 pm #

    >wow…intense emotions…the mangled butchers meat…tight….

  15. Tumblewords: February 14, 2011 at 11:52 pm #

    >I'll want to read this again and again!

  16. Elaine February 15, 2011 at 12:24 am #

    >Vivid and engaging. I enjoyed this a lot

  17. cosmos cami February 15, 2011 at 2:16 am #

    >Great rhythm and appropriate message for today. LOLTho' this poem is nothing to LOL at, right?Anyway, loved the last line and 2nd stanza.

  18. The Restaurant Manager February 15, 2011 at 2:29 am #

    >Wow! Greatness.

  19. Kodjo Deynoo. February 15, 2011 at 3:53 am #

    >Some fine words woven here in darkness

  20. The Barreness February 15, 2011 at 5:31 am #

    >*sigh*I've missed you, sweetness.- B x

  21. 120 Socks February 15, 2011 at 6:16 am #

    >Sharp, brilliant fast engaging structure, powerful.

  22. Tess Kincaid February 15, 2011 at 8:32 am #

    >Raw and earthy. Powerful write, Michael.

  23. Kim Nelson February 15, 2011 at 9:20 am #

    >Wow! Powerful imagery and a sense of loss and tragedy. Great read.

  24. Lena February 15, 2011 at 11:25 am #

    >I love this!!"a sawed off blobof tangledbutcher's meatyou can have back"God, how I'd loved to have come up with these words for my ex's…..!!

  25. Helen February 15, 2011 at 12:27 pm #

    >Valentine's Day will never seem the same ….

  26. Jingle February 17, 2011 at 8:34 pm #

    >love it,creative and beautiful tale.

  27. Carrie Burtt February 18, 2011 at 6:45 pm #

    >An amazing take on the prompt…i love it!:-)

  28. Martin H. February 20, 2011 at 3:32 am #

    >Powerful stuff, Micael. Poetry24…where news is the Muse

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