>More of The Dance

11 Jan


“Who do you think you are…?” she mumbled to herself.

No matter what she did, what she wrote, he would never return.  His ghost had even abandoned her.  Vivaldi swelled and crashed against the walls, vibrating the floorboards.

She paced in front of the battered typewriter, her only confidante left. The whiskey burned her throat and she reveled in its sting. The antique Zippo he’d given her as a peace offering sat next to his photo. She clicked its spark to life, envying the dancing flame as it moved in time with the screaming violins.

It had to be said.

Part I
Part II


26 Responses to “>More of The Dance”

  1. anthonynorth January 11, 2011 at 9:59 am #

    >Nicely done. Lots of power in the words.

  2. Deborah January 11, 2011 at 10:48 am #

    >You painted such a vivid picture in so few words, I loved it.

  3. C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel Wilson January 11, 2011 at 10:49 am #

    >Boy, I want to read the story that comes out of this. Powerful writing.

  4. Jingle January 11, 2011 at 10:50 am #

    >screaming violins, powerful line.well done.:)

  5. Oilfield Trash January 11, 2011 at 11:12 am #

    >Nice. On another note I had actually forgotten about the type writer.

  6. becca January 11, 2011 at 11:17 am #

    >once again you amaze me with your words

  7. The Empress January 11, 2011 at 12:35 pm #

    >In a word, lovely!

  8. Kristen Haskell January 11, 2011 at 12:43 pm #

    >What an image. I really went places with that fine piece of writing.

  9. Pam Tucker January 11, 2011 at 1:42 pm #

    >Wonderful! Loved, loved, this…

  10. Mrs. Hyde January 11, 2011 at 2:17 pm #

    >You know how I love the 100 word stories. I wish I could do that, but I'm just too damned wordy.

  11. lightverse January 11, 2011 at 4:19 pm #

    >Scorching – and wonderful!

  12. Tess Kincaid January 11, 2011 at 4:45 pm #

    >SO evocative. Fantastic write!

  13. Fireblossom January 11, 2011 at 8:08 pm #

    >Hmm, Vivaldi is my favorite classical composer, and I've never thought of his music as crashing or screaming.Does anybody still use a typewriter?Sorry if I'm picking nits. I did like the piece, Rabbit.

  14. Helen January 11, 2011 at 9:38 pm #

    >Intense … I enjoyed this!!!

  15. Lolamouse January 11, 2011 at 10:22 pm #

    >I love the line "his ghost had even abandoned her" -how empty and desperate feeling! I'm amazed again by how you paint such a vivid picture with only (and exactly) 100 words. How much editing does that take?

  16. Reflections January 12, 2011 at 1:39 am #

    >Nicely done…. intriguing images created.

  17. Mary January 12, 2011 at 8:41 am #

    >I want to know all about her! You make me want more. What higher praise can I give?

  18. Cad January 12, 2011 at 10:59 am #

    >I like Vivaldi too, believe it or not…

  19. Rene/ Not The Rockefellers January 12, 2011 at 2:11 pm #

    >this is right on…i can smell the butane as i press the cool Zippo into my handand then that flame dances, entrances

  20. Tumblewords: January 12, 2011 at 9:38 pm #

    >Fiery piece – love the imagery.

  21. Jinksy January 13, 2011 at 6:03 am #

    >And the music plays…

  22. Suko January 13, 2011 at 2:19 pm #

    >Very passionate and full of life. Wonderful mag!

  23. Terresa January 15, 2011 at 3:21 am #

    >Screaming violins, bring it. A fresh write!

  24. Doctor FTSE January 16, 2011 at 7:48 am #

    >Screaming Vivaldi? Listen to Nigel Kennedy's interpretation of the "Winter" movement of the "Four Seasons". When asked to explain, he says "Winter's cold and windy, innit?"An interesting Magpie.

  25. Lena January 17, 2011 at 4:56 pm #

    >I like a rapid Vivaldi, too. Stirs up a Storm for me!Lovely write, Rabbit….and I have to admit, I still have my old Brother typewriter (working) as my confidante, when there's a shortage of keys for fingers in my house…!!

  26. Rabbit ૐ January 17, 2011 at 8:21 pm #

    >Lena, just today I found a vintage, working Royal Aristocrat on ebay for $20 to add to my collection. I about peed myself!

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